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標題: 火影 Theft Heart [列印本頁]

作者: ura0124 時間: 10-3-19 11:03
標題: 火影 Theft Heart
it's been three years already sasuke, do you remember me? did you know that when we left me lying there, you also stole my heart.-------------------------whatever place sasuke's in---------------------
hm...... it's getting annoying. it's already been three years but why do i still remember her? Remember my heart sank deep down when i lay her down on the ground? Sasuke's thoughts were trouble, on his handsome dark face, not only tireness showed up, but also lonliness. "Sakura.......... what did you do to me?" He murmured into the darkness and starred out the window. Sakura had always been one the the girls that were chasing him around say that they 'liked' him, but not only did Sasuke felt that they were as annoying as hell, he also knew that they supposidly liked him as what one would like an idol. Sakura was the prettiest one of all the others but even she couldn't make him give her a second glance..... until they were partnered up along with Naruto. Sakura was shallow, she didn't like naruto and Lee whom both liked her, instead, she only looks at Sasuke. But though she was shallow, she also gave everyone a home in her heart, she cared for one when needed. a thought suddenly jumped up at him, did her liked her??? then a smirk form at the edge of his lips, who am i kidding that's not possible.

a knock on the door made sasuke jump, his hand on this sword as reflax........ who was it?
"excuse me." a quiet voice sounded as sthe coor opened, it was one of his servants.
"wat???" sasuke's face turn emotionless,it was stupid if he showed any feelings for others.

"konohagakure's send troops over to fight us." the servant looked at sasuke in interest. "what do you think we should do? you are now the leader sine you kill Orochimaru-sama. the enemy doesn't seems to know that though."

"they don't need to, this isn't a british soldier fight, there are no rules to this battle." Sasuke's face remain emotionless, he looked just like a lifeless doll. " get the guys and go and stop them."

"and you?" the servant raised an eyebrow. "will you be fighting and directing the fight"

"and few troops of ninja's from Konohagakure isn't worth going, they'll be all dead within a few days with our man." Sasuke turn back to the window. "Go now and when you come back with the news of victory, you shall be rewarded." and with that the servant disappeard and the door shut behind him.

Sasuke sighed, he didn't mind to fight the Konohahakure, infacthe would have done it since Orochimaru died, but something hold him back, the crying face of Sakura when he left her were still haunting him. What would happen if he'd stay? would Sakura be by his side? but then would he have been able to avange his father by killing his brother? what if..... brother didn't kill everyone, i would be just as happier than anyone cold ever be.

--------two days later at sasuke's place---------

"master, i've brought the news that everyone in the troop that konohahakure has send died..."
"good job then..." sasuke didn't wait or him to finish he was sure what the rest would be.
"....except for this one girl, the hospital chief could not be captured." the servant finished and looked at sasuke. "i'm afraid that it shall take me alittle longer to have this aranged and figured out."
"take your time and make sure.... that who ever this is, is capture and send to me. i want to see who in honohagakure has the power to excaped the hands of my ninjas." after the servan exited, sasuke's handsome face looked worried. what happens if it's sakura??? he was sure it had to be her, Naruto didn't and would never know an inch about healing, but sakura.... sakura has always been the one taking care of the teams health and relationships. what happens if it her?
what should i do?

should i kill her?
................

作者: ura0124 時間: 10-3-20 12:57
標題: 回覆 1# ura0124 的文章
Thanks guys.... i'm in the USA so i can't really type in chinese..... but i can read it

作者: ura0124 時間: 10-3-21 01:10
標題: chapter two
the sky was a pretty smooth blue when Sakura looked up at it, it was noon, and she's been on this mission for three days now, everyother guys on the team were either captured or killed except her. but she was still determind to get through. Sasuke..... are you there? she turned her head suddenly, and caught a small rock frown at her. her blazing green eyes scamed the man who was now infront of her.... he had a scary looking face, all scared up. but his eyes were questioning. what was a guy like him doing here? under Orochimaru's order?....
"you must be the one from konohagakure's troop surviver." His voice was like he was playing with toys, more like toying and gambling his life and other's away.
"it's only polite to say one's name before asking for others. or does the Orchimaru's man have no pride?" Sakura didn't like this man, he wasn't pleasant,and she wasn't gonnna talk him talk much longer.
"ah.... of coures....my name is.....Shouka..... <shou in japanese is little and ka... is iike.....something> " shouka said something else but sakura wasn't able to hear it........ she blacked out just as he punched her stomach....... really really hard.
"now off to Sasuke-sama" Shouka got sakura on his shoulder and disappeared.......

作者: 呆呆的仔仔 時間: 10-3-21 18:01
ok，我不認為我可以打出標準的英文所以我放棄了（喂！）
嘛，這位仁兄（？）您說您目前住在美國是吧？
這......看得懂中文卻打不了中文這點很奇怪吧（歪）
明明網路上有一堆載點，連奇摩都有輸入法了（再歪）
若你真的需要，我可以幫你找一下網址喔ＸＤＤＤＤＤＤ
需要注音還是拼音輸入法啊？ＸＤＤＤＤＤ

若可以，我還真希望你可以用中文打出來這篇文章......
畢竟不是每個人的英文程度都是那麼的好......（向上望）（囧）

作者: ura0124 時間: 10-3-22 02:38
well i tried just now with google translate but...... the chinese version doesn't make a lot of sense......... *cry* what should i do???

[ 本文章最後由 ura0124 於 10-3-22 02:47 編輯 ]

作者: 呆呆的仔仔 時間: 10-3-22 06:45
OMG......（囧
我可沒叫你用辜狗的翻譯軟體啊......那東西若只是翻譯一小段文的話還可以
但若想翻譯整段文章的話......那只會被當成火星文看待吧（咦？）

現在的重點是，你會不會用中文輸入法打中文啦～
管它是拼音還是注音，會打是重點！！（？）
嘖嘖，我先去上課，晚點再幫你找載點（奔）

作者: ura0124 時間: 10-3-22 12:04
thanks dude........ well.... i don't know where the keys are..... on the keypad.... in chinese spelling thingie

作者: 呆呆的仔仔 時間: 10-3-23 07:00
喔喔，我懂了 (←看了好久才懂得傢伙)
您是說注音在鍵盤上的位子是吧?
呃，這個嘛......因為鐵傲上不能打注音，所以我看改天再幫你弄張圖好了 (←這麼有心力?!)
嘛，畢竟是文區新人嘛，當然要好好照顧一下啊XDDDDD

作者: ura0124 時間: 10-3-23 07:45
thanks dude (r u a guy), hm........ computers are so......... complicated

作者: ura0124 時間: 10-3-23 08:01
chapter three.....kinda???

Sasuke was monching on a cookie when his door was slamed opened. Shouka walked in with sakura on his shoulder, he wasn't exactly carefull either when he dumped sakura on the ground.
"what did the door every do to you?" sasuke eyed the broken door with distaste. He liked the paterns on the door.
"i brought the girl back with me."Shuoka ignored the question and looked at Sasuke. unwillingly Sasuke looked at the girl on the floor, hoping that it wasn't Sakura. But no, the girl's hair was pink, hair eyes were closed but Sasuke already knew who he was, Sakura.
"fine i'll grant any wish of yours that's within my ability." Sasuke closed his eyes, he didn't want to look at Sakura anymore, she was bruised and cut, and he wasn't sure if he can keep still any longer.
"My lord..." Shouka paused to look Sasuke in the eyes. "i ask to live with this girl and have her join us." Sasuke's eyes immediatly flow open, did he have a hearing problem?
"anything but that."
"my lord, it's with your ability as you promised...." Shouka nail down next to Sakura and comtinued. "is it to be said that our lord does not keep his word?"
......... Fine he can have her....it's not like she's important any way.... but why do i not want to??????
"Keep her than.... it will not be said that i, Sasuke (and whatever his last name is.) don't keep promises." Sasuke imediatly regretted it after he finished, and his mind blanked out..........What did i do???

作者: 呆呆的仔仔 時間: 10-3-23 13:46
啊哈哈，因為懶得用打的，所以就乾脆直接截圖比較快（喂）

新注音輸入法.JPG

以上這個就是鍵盤上的注音位置了
當然，不管是注音還是新注音的位置都是一樣的
用久了就背得起來啦，以後就不用邊看鍵盤邊打字了（笑）

然後啊，我忘了站規有沒有寫到耶（回頭望）
總之呢，我可以給你該網站的主頁，或是該分頁，然後就交給你自己去找啦（拍肩）
因為這裡不提供載點.....鐵傲支持正版（汗）

微軟新注音輸入法

因為是在微軟官網上的，若您的電腦不是正版可能就不行了（汗）
還有啊，在控制台那邊因該有個 "地區及語言選項" 的子選項吧？
你就可以在裡面找看看，看有沒有繁體中文的選項唄～
不行的話就得另外下載輸入法了（點頭）

以上～

作者: 旗~木~瑩~ 時間: 10-3-24 21:52
英文版是很好沒錯...
不過老實說...我看不懂...而且本人還滿討厭英文的...(小聲

作者: 呆呆的仔仔 時間: 10-3-24 22:21
小瑩，我真的可以了解你的感受......(拍肩)
雖然說我稍微看得懂，但還是得靠字典來幫忙的那種感覺......
會讓你突然之間更討厭英文!! (喂!!)
會讓你想放棄英文這科 (住手!!)

嘛，不過沒關係啦~
畢竟這是小說嘛，所要用到的形容詞自然就比較多
什麼比較級啊最高級的東西通通都出爐了你看看 (扶額)
(拍肩) 這自然是普通人(?)所看不懂的東西嘛 (嘆?)

作者: ura0124 時間: 10-3-25 12:34
well...... hm..... you know how when you guys say something.. that's a slang and i don't get it at all but..... i'd figure that's something funny cause...... (though Chinese is my first language) i suck at chinese........ but if you guys have any question you can just ask me.... and i'll try and explain it to you guys!!! how's that sound???

:hug:

作者: 呆呆的仔仔 時間: 10-3-25 16:37
you know...... it is very hard to use English for us (who?).
Whatever in reading or write in English...
May be it just because English is not the first language for us, or may be just because we did not study hard (!?)......

hum...... however, we stil hope you can write this story in Chinese language.
so that we can understand it better. ^ ^
(Poor Engish...... If it's has wrong grammar, sorry for that. >"<)

PS. may be you can teach us English!! XD

[ 本文章最後由呆呆的仔仔於 10-3-25 16:42 編輯 ]

作者: ura0124 時間: 10-3-26 02:03
kay tyte!!! well..... i'm gonnna be moving back to taiwan ......... once i finish 7th grade...so........ yeah..... by the way your english is really good.... i didn't even know how to say hi when i came to america.....hahhahahahahm...... i'm gonna try and translate it but........

:eek: :eek: :eek:

作者: ura0124 時間: 10-3-26 07:19
Chinese version of chapter..... three??? or four

櫻不知道她受傷的時候，她跳下床的。漆成白色的房間與現在窗戶，只有一扇門。
“你醒了，櫻花小姐。”冷靜的聲音聽起來她身後，並轉向櫻發現自己俯視壽卡誰坐在幾英尺從床上。
“我在哪兒？”櫻停下來瞪著壽卡。 “沒有等待，讓我猜。上午邪惡的軍營，在那裡他的邪惡 Orochimaru列車邪惡的士兵和youir可能其中一個邪惡的士兵。”
“哼...我想你的權利。我們在邪惡陣營你說的，我就是邪惡的士兵。”壽卡停頓了一下，他不看生氣的。 “我已經喜歡你。”咦？？？櫻有點措手不及。她不是他的敵人？為什麼他如此輕鬆呢？
櫻眼睛充滿希望的大門，也許她可以擺脫前壽卡抓住了她。
“我不會嘗試，如果我是你的。外面有警衛和信任我...他們不喜歡你，我懷疑，你可以在門與你的傷口。”壽卡抬起腳休息它在床上。 “休息一下。”
櫻花是礦石願意坐下來了床上，她畢竟是累。
“難道你要問我，我們將與你？”壽卡打破了沉默的櫻花集中在她受傷的癒合。
“沒有理由。”
“為什麼不呢？是你不好奇？”
“告訴你。”櫻結轉看看壽卡的眼睛。 “一個女孩的夢想，能有真的沒有一點知道期貨是嗎？做你想做在我想出一個辦法讓離開這裡。”當她完成她閉上了眼睛，又睡著了。
.......... “你永遠不會改變你？櫻花”壽卡喃喃地自言自語，他觸動了覆蓋了櫻花。
............

english version of chapter three/ four

Sakura was unaware of her injuries when she jumped off of the bed. the room painted white with now windows, but only a door.
"your awake, Miss Sakura." a cool voice sounded behind her, and Sakura turned to find herself looking down at Shouka who was seated a few feet from the bed.
"where am i?" Sakura stopped and glared at Shouka. "no wait, let me guess. am in the evil camp where Evil Orochimaru trains his evil soldiers and youir probably one of the evil soldiers."
"hm...i suppose your right. we are in the evil camp you speak of, and i am one of the evil soldiers. "Shouka paused, he didn't look offended at all. "i'm already liking you." huh??? Sakura was a bit caught off guard. isn't she his enemy? why is he so relaxed?
Sakura eyed the door with hope, maybe she can get out before Shouka caught her.
"i wouldn't try that if i were you. there are guards outside and trust me... they don't like you, and i doubt that you can get to the door with your wounds." Shouka lifted his foot and rested it on the bed. "get some rest."
Sakura was ore than willing to sit back down on the bed, she was tired after all.
"Aren't you going to ask me what we're going to do with you?" Shouka broke the silence as Sakura focus on healing her injuries.
"no reason to."
"why not? aren't you curious?"
"tell you what." Sakura rolled over to look at shouka in the eyes. " a girl can dream and there's really no point knowing the futures is there? do what you want before i figure out a way to get out of here." as she finished she shut her eyes and fell asleep again.
.......... "you never change do you? Sakura" Shouka murmured to himself as he pulled the covers over Sakura.
............

作者: 呆呆的仔仔 時間: 10-3-26 09:02
我敢相信你上面那段英文絕對是丟到辜狗的翻譯軟體翻譯的！！（指！）
哈哈，不過你至少有嚐試過了嘛ＸＤ
然那依然是火星文（汗）

嗯哼，要回台灣了啊？這麼巧，我也快回去了ＸＤ
或許可能是因為我們倆都是在美式教育學校所以比較早放暑假吧（燦笑）
七年級了阿妳？加油唄，想當初庵也被留過（菸）

作者: ura0124 時間: 10-3-26 11:42
hm..... really????? sides i forgot to ask.... r u a guy??? well.. i think i'm gonna suck so hard when i do 8th grade in taiwan.......... more like die there...lol

作者: 呆呆的仔仔 時間: 10-3-29 09:37
嘛，學業加油啦XD
還有，記得早日寫出中文版的 Theft Heart 嘿XDDD

作者: ura0124 時間: 10-3-31 09:06
thanks...
i seriously needs to start working on the next paragraph... been slacking off since it's the state testing,...LOL

:funk: :funk: :funk: :funk:

作者: 旗~木~瑩~ 時間: 10-4-2 14:05
加油加油!!!!期待你的中文版~~~~

作者: ura0124 時間: 10-4-3 09:18
ahahahahaaha... is the chinese version really that much better??? i didn't understand any of it

作者: 戀●櫻 時間: 10-4-6 10:20
全部都是英文呢！
我...放棄！（舉白旗

我的英文實在爛透了
期待中文喔

作者: ura0124 時間: 10-4-9 14:32
Sasuke caught sight of Shouka around the corner by the lunch room, where's sakura? Did shouka kill her? Sasuke wasn't sure why but in the moment he felt as if a thousand knife stabbed his heart, piercing it into a thousand pieces.  was it ever really necessary to have left konohagakure?  no no no no no .... i was able to kill both orochimaru and bro...... it was the right choice..... staying in that place wasn't going to take me anywhere. Sasuke tild himself silently as he trailed after Shouka. Shouka had lead Sasuke to the doors of his room when he stopped and rested his hands on the door nob.
“Sasuke-sama. Is there anything you need? You're well past the lunchroom.” Shouka didn't turn around but continued to stared at the door. Sasuke wasn't surprised at that. Shouka was one of the few that were close to Sasuke's range of ability, and naturally Shouka would at least notice that someone was following him.
“the girl that was from konohagakure. What did you do with her?” Sasuke remain as calm-looking as he could, if shouka knew that he knew Sakura, Shouka would have probably tortured her.
“i was told that her name was Sakura, a very well-liked figure in Konohagakure.  In charge of all the hospitals.” Shouka now turned slowly to sasukehis face was smooth but his eyes were full of concern.
“don't avoid my question.” Sasuke stared right back at Shouka as the answer quickly.
“Miss. Sakura is in my room resting from the battle wounds she have.” they were both stareing at each other, wishing that  maybe their stares would be able to burn a hole on each other.
“i'll pay her a visit then.”
“Of course.” Shouka  turned and rested his hands on the nob once again. She'll be delighted that her ex-team mate wants to visit her since he was the one who order her to be captured.

作者: 呆呆的仔仔 時間: 10-4-10 21:38
囧，連第五章也都出來了嘛（汗顏）
反觀我們這些寫中文同人的最近都沒有生出什麼片段出來（蹲角落劃圈）

說真的啦，這篇故事還是請我朋友幫我解釋我才知道故事內容再講什麼（狂汗）
不然我真的看不懂（掩面）

媽啦，沒有人要玩故事接龍嘛？Q口Q

作者: ura0124 時間: 10-4-11 06:53
that'd be kinda cool.... but also hard too!!!!!!!...... everyone has a diferent version of who should end up with whom and how things should go........

tell me what u think of the story (what it's about)....

:eek: :eek: :eek:

作者: ura0124 時間: 10-4-14 12:42
well... you'll get it eventually if you keep working on it

作者: ura0124 時間: 10-4-19 03:53
The door swinged openned, with Shouka leading, Sasuke stepped into the white room. Everything in the room looked pale except the bright pink hair which laid spread ou on the pillow. Slowly Sakura openned her eyes and turn to see the two men entering the room. She reganized shouka then with a gasp she saw Sasuke stroding across the room.
Shouka was annoyed at that, why is it that sasuke just keep on staying on the line. Shouka knew that Sasuke did liked Sakura but he was tied to other things like killing his brother, then regrating everything. But how did he manage to be on the line where everyone tries to give him a second chance?

-----------Shouka's Flashback into his childhood.-----------------------

he was an orphan, an orphan who watched his parent get killed. He hated everthing, the pitty and digusted looks people gave him. He was fairly strong though, able to beat up most kids his age.
One day, he saw a girl under the a Sakura tree. She looked really ordinary to him, no strengh, but she captured him. Day by day, Shouka would visit the Sakura tree in the afternoon just to see her, and on day she spoke to him.
“want some?” Shouka could see that she meant the cookies she was munching on.
“uh.... sure,” he paused and sat down next to her, “thanks”
“Welcome.” she smiled up at him, grinning brightly. How does she manage to look so ordinary, and yet so shinny? Shouka asked himself silently.
“your pretty!” Sakura said as she laid back down on the soft grass.
“..........” Shouka felt the heat of his face and ears as he touching his butter brown hair, it curled around his finger as he ran his fingers across. From then everyday the girl would come and share her sweets with him and then, they would watch the flowers.
Spring was almost over but the girl named Sakura never showed up again, but still Shouka would still go there and wait for her if she comes by again...........

作者: 呆呆的仔仔 時間: 10-4-19 10:57
第六章呀！！而且發的時間還是台灣方面（？）的四點？！
喔喔喔～好久沒看到有人那麼熱血了啊！！
（謎：你燃燒起來了嘛？（？）

嘖嘖，可惡！我們這些老人不能就這樣算了！
不甘示弱是王道（只有妳這麼想）
喔啊我要來去寫文了～（狂奔）

作者: ura0124 時間: 10-4-21 08:38
dont be sad......... i there wasn't school that day so i stayed up late ahahahahahaha

作者: ura0124 時間: 11-5-9 20:34
i'm back in Taiwan YEAH!!!

作者: ura0124 時間: 11-5-11 21:53
... no one ever comes here.....

作者: ura0124 時間: 11-5-11 22:07
Sasuke stared at Sakura for just a moment, it wasn't easy, but he somehow managed to look away. Sakura looked really weak, dark circles under her clear green eyes, obvious against her pale white skin. what's really the point. sasuke though, i can't let her gp, but i can't kill her either. Sakura smiled warmly at Sasuke. "long time no see." she thought she'd be mad at him when she sees him. but she couldn't. she thought she had forgotten her. but she didn't, it only made her miss him even more. they don't know, the each other, missed them just as much as they had miss eac other. they didn't know, that they were still in love with each other.

作者: 呆呆的仔仔 時間: 11-5-22 15:56
呃，這算是更新嘛? (望上)
如果是的話你要不要再上面打一下章節?
免得有人搞不清楚 XD (←就是這個人)

作者: ura0124 時間: 11-11-9 15:21
恩恩～～～耶大家~~~

我終於學會打中文了
好高興耶
ㄚ對了我新寫了一個原創的故事唷
https://www.gamez.com.tw/thread-562960-1-1.html
拜託拜託去幫我改錯字ＸＤ

作者: ura0124 時間: 11-11-9 15:22

呆呆的仔仔發表於 11-5-22 15:56
呃，這算是更新嘛? (望上)
如果是的話你要不要再上面打一下章節?
免得有人搞不清楚 XD (←就是這個人) ...

恩謝謝指教～～
我下次一定改唷

作者: ura0124 時間: 11-11-9 15:34
本文章最後由 ura0124 於 11-11-9 17:29 編輯

這是增文
sometimes they are the ones who are just too ignorant........... but they can't afford it............
their loved ones, meant to be protected by them........
their pride......as a fighter...
graced as they were...........
they're still just too weak.........
their hearts stolen by each other............
a theft heart, one gone, a lesson taught.
as they falled in love could they stop within time to throw themselves back out?
or would they sense be unreachable to them......
clouded by the loved unknown to them.?

sasuke wasn't sure how'd he'd act when he saw her........... but now he was astonished
for that he couldn't stand to look anywhere else,
but where she sat.
Sakura could feel her cheeks burning up in flames. had she found a way to get out faster she wouldn't have to face sasuke..... not that she
resented him........ she had thought that she knew what she'd feel right now facing him..... but no........
this felt like ages ago....... when they were still on the same team, the same side, fighting back-to-back and when she could look at him for days. Only this was much stronger, she fought the urges to cry.
sasuke could feel his heart ache as he watch her. he could see that she was trying to will the tears back........ but wells of pure green of her eyes were watered............ Shouka stood there......
watching them.
seeing the numorous expression changing on both their faces
knowing that the last was not what he had wished for.
Shouka......... he thought about the guy that had taught him all that he knows of.
do not pity
do not make your precious one to be weak.
if u want to be a knight.
find a princess who won't need protection
one that won't shatter your heart into shreds..........................................

作者: ura0124 時間: 11-11-9 15:34

ura0124 發表於 11-11-9 15:34
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sometimes they are ones who are just ignorant........... but they can't afford it.......... ...

有錯字耶.................請問要怎麼改ㄚ

作者: ura0124 時間: 11-11-9 15:35
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作者: 呆呆的仔仔 時間: 11-11-16 21:06
那個，U大。
版主的話、建議還是要聽喔~ 不然下場就會是如此......最嚴重的話你的帳號還會被和諧掉喔......(望)
然後啊，每當你進到一個新的論壇或是一個新的版的時候，第一篇看的文章最好就是該論壇的總版規或是該版的版規。
要先知道人家的遊戲規則才能加入遊戲啊~ (笑)

絕大部分的版規都會至頂、或者是放在明顯的地方有超聯結這樣。
若用心找的話一定找得到的~

雖然你會覺得很煩，但我們還是要說。
畢竟維護一個論壇的秩序要從基層做起，
雖然我們很渺小，但論壇就是因為有許多這樣的人才能組成的。
所以咯，希望你能諒解~

以上，廢話很多的呆仔飄過~ (逃)

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