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My body had a problem when I was young. I was not as tall as other boys at my age. My mom was concerned (worried) about my health, so she took other people’s advice (suggestion) and took me to a doctor.
I went to a large hospital for some examinations. After the physical check up was completed, I was required to do a blood test for further examination. I was nervous about it because I was afraid of needles. I found out it was not as terrible as I thought when the blood test was done. The examinations were successful.
In spite of having the experience, I am still afraid of the blood checks because of my fear to the needles. 呃...這裡要用 because the needles drive me crazy 我也不反對 囧>
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姆....想到一些建議, 剩下的雖然看的出問題不過我不知道要怎麼講ˊ口ˋ
1. 文章裡面不要在形容詞前面+very 因為讀者不知道你到底是多very 囧>
2. Then, so, and, but 目前只想到這四個, 不要用在句子的第一個字 (沒為什麼, 純粹犯規ˊ口ˋ)
3. 不要把動辭直接加ing 就把他當名詞ˊˋ, 多翻翻字典,有些動辭都會有類似的名詞以tion, sion... 之類的字尾.
4. 如果是給老師的作文,這種稍微正式的作文,不要把字縮寫, 例: wasn't, isn't, they're, he's, 就算很憋也要把字給分開 (有些老師比較不拘束這些, 不過如果遇到很討厭的, 噢~ 一個扣一分)
5. 不要太多it在一起: Until it was over,I found it wasn't so terrible.And it was very successful. 因為很容易搞不懂哪個it是在講哪件事, Until it(抽血) was over,I found it(抽血) wasn't so terrible.And it(抽血還是整個過程?) was very successful. 所以建議一次it一次把整個名詞寫出來,不要重疊, 等你寫多了之後自己就可以調整了
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大概就這樣ˊˋ 畢竟我最後一句也改的不是很好ˊˋ
文章可以多練點多寫點,高階字彙方面不用太擔心,等你寫多了自然會接觸到那些高階字
然後,就以自己所知的文法想辦法讓自己文章能夠順暢就好了,其他的文法也能這樣慢慢培養出來
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