批改作文-If I had superpowers.

dreamer7

If I Had Superpowers

             If I was superman,I would had superpowers.I wish

    that I had invisible superpowers.It is cool to see anything

     that I want.Maybe I can help policeman to take robber.Nobody

can see me forever.                                                                  

           Superpowers can bring useful help and useless

     as well.For example,I had invisible superpowers,so everything

lost its mystery.It seems that everything has become very

boring.                                                                                          

          Of caurse superpowers is not existence.It is just

                                  imaginational to satisfy person's desire.                                                               

請幫我看一下哪裡錯誤!!

及改進之處~

感激不盡!

Katliang

If I Had Superpowers
             If I was superman,I would had superpowers.I wish
    that I had invisible superpowers.It is cool to see anything
     that I want.Maybe I can help policeman to take robber.Nobody
can see me forever.                                                                  
           Superpowers can bring useful help and useless
     as well.For example,I had invisible superpowers,so everything
lost its mystery.It seems that everything has become very
boring.                                                                                          
          Of caurse superpowers is not existence.It is just
                                  imaginational to satisfy person's desire

第一 你這篇文章應該是要在現代式吧
第二 逗點符號有點亂
第三 有些字的用法不妥
以下是在下幫你改的錯誤


If I Have Superpowers
            
     If I am a superman,I would have superpowers.I wish
that I have invisible superpowers,because it is cool to see anything
that I want. Maybe I can help policeman to take down robber and with nobody
able to see me forever.                                                                  
    Superpowers can be useful help and useless.
For example,if I have invisible superpowers, everything
lost is a mystery.It would seem that everything has become very
boring.                                                                                          
     Of course superpowers does not existence.It is just
an imagination to satisfy a person's desire


以下是在下會寫的文章
If I have superpowers

     If I am given a chance to choose any superpower, I would choose invisbility.
Invisibility allows me not to be seen while still being able to bring justice the
world that I live in.  I can help the police officers to hunt down criminals as well
as just ordinarly peeking around in places that I never dreamed of seeing.  Places
that I would go without people yelling at me 'you can't go in there' or 'this place is
forbidden for any tourism'.  
     However, invisibility may be a drag sometimes.  For one thing, my friend circle will
decrease dramatically, afterall no one wants to be thought wierd.  And for another, I
will have to be naked for the rest of my life, according to invisible man.  Without friends
and cloth, things may get chilly not only on the outside, but also on the inside.  And I hardly
think anyone will move to the tropic area to get a sunburn and being seen after he or she
is already invisible.  So, I guess all superpowers have Pro's and con's, just the way one
will view it.
    Superpowers may be interesting and exciting at first, however as time passes, things
will be back to way they were before.  Fortunately superpowers are just fantacies that
people dream of to satifsy thier desires.  Afterall you are your own superpower whether
you like it or not.

琥珀之瞳

原帖由 Katliang 於 08-7-8 23:01 發表

第一 你這篇文章應該是要在現代式吧
...

我想dreamer大應該是要用

Ｉｆ　Ｉ　＂were＂........

不可能成真的假設句吧

Katliang

恩~就算是假設句~
她還是要根據她的文章來寫阿~
如果她的文章從過去式跳到現代式然後再跳回來
這就不對了~
所以最好的方法就是全部都轉變成現代式

If ~已經成為了假設
were 跟 am 之間就只是時間的差距而已

dreamer7

Of course superpowers 【does】 not existence.It is just
an imagination to satisfy【 a】 person's desire


不懂會何要用does而不是is
和
person's desire前要加a??????

Katliang

person's desire 是單數的~ human desires~ 才是雙數

如果用is 的話 翻譯就是 當然超能力不是存在
用does 的話 當然超能力並不存在

英文要活用~不能太死板~一個字一個字翻的話~很吃力
也很煩~
學英文應該要是種興趣~
大大加油瞜!!

dreamer7

恩恩
了解了!!
很感謝大家花時間指正我
會努力的~

williamchong007

原帖由 Katliang 於 08-7-9 11:02 AM 發表
恩~就算是假設句~
她還是要根據她的文章來寫阿~
如果她的文章從過去式跳到現代式然後再跳回來
這就不對了~
所以最好的方法就是全部都轉變成現代式

If ~已經成為了假設
were 跟 am 之間就只是時間的差距而已 ...

If clause
Type1 (am)
Probable action/result in the future according to a real condition

Type2 (were)
Possible action/result according to a less probable condition in the future
Fantasized result or action according to an unreal (untrue) condition in the present

so......."were"?